GirlChat #278656
They're your words--keep it that way.
Posted by Rakhma on Tuesday, September 21 2004 at 03:51:32AM
In reply to Letter to my friends, advice on rewriting it? posted by Remo on Monday, September 20 2004 at 9:39:03PM
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I could mark up all the grammar mistakes in red pen, but that would only weaken it, so I won't. It looks solid. It feels solid. It's damn good.
With all that said, there are one or two things that stopped me for a moment. This is why you know this about me now: (wife) and I agreed and told some of you these things because you had children who if I were in your shoes, I would expect to know. This was someone we are around frequently and this is fair to do. I didn't understand these two sentences. Was it one person, or some?You would have heard it from me before your kids were two... Do they really need to know your AOA? Maybe. I don't know. It might just gross them out unnecessarily. Think about it.The third has been an intensity of hatred for me that I dont understand. It would not surprise me if one of you reading this has homicidal feelings towards me. It would not surprise me if one of you acted on that. Good luck. God be with you. God be with them, too. |
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